Children's Work

Our Favourite Writing

On Saturday I went to my Aunty’s wedding with my mum and my dad. It was at Rabbit Island. After that we went home to have lunch. Then we went to her house to celebrate. On the way home I went on my dads motorbike. It was noisy! I enjoyed going on the motorbike.

Phoenix

“All the better to help you die” said the Big Bad Wolf. Little Red Riding Hood screamed and ran. In came Little Red Riding Hoods dad and said to the Big Bad Wolf “time to die”, but it was to late because the Big Bad Wolf already got chopped all apart. I would not stop to talk if I knew it was a stranger.

Lexi

Traction Man is sailing the seven seas on his boat. He invited four of his best friends.I n front of his boat there is an amazing sifting shark. Traction Man has a very special holiday on his ship. ”At last we are here,” said Ally. Traction Man saw an amazing beautiful tweeting bird. It was singing “tweet tweet”. He had a good trip. And headed home. On the way home he had some dinner. At last he had his nice warm bed. In the morning he invited Ally and her baby puppy around. After they went home he had a long long long sleep in his very warm bed.

Josina

Our Traction Man Songs

(Sing to the tune of The Princess Who Lived Long Ago)

These songs are written based on the book by Mini Grey called Traction Man and the Beach Odessey. You will meet a called called Truffles and Traction Man's new friends, the Dollies!

There was a dog called Truffles, Truffles, Truffles there was a dog called Truffles long, long ago.

They all went to the rock pools, rock pools, rock pools they all went to the rock pools long, long ago.

They found crabs in it, crabs in it, crabs in it they found crabs in it long, long ago.

A massive wave came along, came along, came along a massive wave came along long, long ago.

They ended up in the dollies castle, dollies castle, dollies castle they ended up in the dollies castle long, long ago.

The dollies helped them get out, get out, get out the dollies helped them get out long, long ago.

By Lucy

Traction Man was packing, packing, packing Traction Man was packing long, long ago.

Traction Man went in the rock pool, rock pool, rock pool Traction Man went in the rock pool long, long ago.

They got taken away, taken away, taken away they got taken away long, long ago.

There was a dog called Fluffy, Fluffy, Fluffy there was a dog called Fluffy long, long ago.

There were some beautiful dollies, dollies, dollies there were some beautiful dollies long, long ago.

They had a very magma day, magma day, magma day they had a very magma day long, long ago.

By Nareise and Ciara D

Show me don't tell me

  

We have been learning about showing the reader what is happening instead of just telling them. This helps the reader to get a picture in their head of what we have written.

Have a look and see how we did!

The Elephant was big became....

Paige	The enormous elephant was stomping hard like a giant.
Brianna	The elephant was stomping and making a noise
Kayla	His trunk was huge and wrinkly grey.
Ciara Mc	The elephant made an earthquake come.
Amelia	It shook the ground,
Nareise, Lucy	The elephant was stomping. It felt like an earthquake. It looked like its leg was broken.
Josina	I am stomping with my legs, My body is heavy.
Jayden	The elephant has a long trunk and is stomping.
Hao-Ren	The elephant is tremendous. The elephant is stomping.
Deegan	The heavy elephant has a long trunk.
Natalia	The elephant was stomping his feet.
Tommy	The elephant stomps like a … I am heavy because I have lots of weight.
Zac	The wind? from the elephant pushes me back.
Kaide	The elephant is long and does big steps.

The boy was crying became....

Frank	His tears are dripping down his cheeks. The boy is sniffing like a squeaking mouse
Paige	His dazzling tears were dripping from his wet face
Brianna	The boy was shaking like a baby. He had tears coming out.
Kayla	There were tears running down his cheeks
Ollie	The boy was sobbing. His tears were like raindrops falling from the sky.
Ciara Mc	The boy curled up. He was shaking. He had tears dripping down his face.
Amelia	Tears were running down his face. They were blue.
Nareise	He was shrugged up. The tears were dripping down his face. He was curled up into a ball.
Lucy	There are tears running down his face. He was tucking his knees up and putting his arms around them.
Josina	My tears are soaking, I am in a ball. I am shaking.
Lochan	Tears are running down his cheeks. He is moving. He is curled up.
Libby	He has tears coming out.
Jayden	The boy has his head down and is shaking. He wants Mum.
Hao-Ren	The boy is shaking. The boy is making a sound. His head is covered with his shoulders. His tears are dripping down.
Deegan	I cuddled up. My face is wet.
Natalia	The little boy had tears down his face
Tommy	He is shaking. Tears are coming down his cheeks.
Lincoln	I was shivering. I was shaking. My nose turning blue.
Zac	His back is shaking, he is crouched down as little as a snail. Tears come down his face.
Kaide	He was sniffing and tears came down his face. He cuddled up like a cat.

The water was cold became....

Frank	My head is shaking My shoulders are shrugging My face is blue
Brianna	The water is making everybody shiver and turn blue.
Kayla	I am shivering. I feel like an ice block. My face is turning blue.
Ollie	He was shivering
Ciara Mc	He was shivering. He was blue.
Amelia	He was shivering and turned blue.
Nareise	I was shivering like an ice block. I was shrugging, I felt like I was frozen.
Lucy	I am turning blue like the sea.
Josina	I’m shaking, I’m shivering, I’m stomping with my legs. I am hugging, my teeth are shivering.
Lochan	My body is turning blue. I am shivering. I am turning into ice.
Libby	I am shaking. I am shivering. My body is turning blue.
Ashin	My face is blue. I am very cold and I am ice.
Micah	I am shivering. I am blue because I am shivering.
Jayden	I cross my arms and put my shoulders up.
Hao-Ren	I am freezing. I cuddle up. My body is turning blue. I am standing up.
Jaden	I am shivering. I am frozen.
Deegan	I am shivering. My nose is turning blue.
Natalia	I am shivering and I have a purple nose.
Tommy	I am shivering. My whole body is turning purple.
Lincoln	He was going wa, wa, wa. Water came out of his eyes.
Zac	He is crouching into himself and moving his hands up and down. His face is going blue. His knees are shaking.
Kaide	I am shivering. My nose is turning blue.